UPDATE: As you guys help me out, I’m making adjustments to test out. You totally don’t have to comment on all, I’m just making myself a list, lol! Thanks a bunch, guys!
Holabonjour, peeps. Today’s post will be all about my participation in a completely awesome contest going on at my girl Shelley Watter’s blog! Here’s hoping a few entrants hop over to let me know what they think of my twitter-sized pitch! (And thanks to Lori who’s helped me practice this week!
A little note about the contest: it’s for unagented writers with a completed manuscript. All you have to do is be a follower of Shelley’s blog or twitter and compose a 140-character pitch for your novel. The winner gets a full request from Suzie Townsend! (Yes. That IS awesome.) You don’t have to do the critiquing, but you DO have to head over to the blog and add your name to the list! Oh and write the twitter pitch!
Now for the main event! I’m trying not to get hung up on little interchangeable words so I won’t post three pretty identical alternatives (but that’s really hard for me so I hope you appreciate it!) –
(1) With the orbit of two worlds dictating cyclical time, Avrilis can run with the boy she wasn’t meant to save…but it won’t be the last time.
So! That took…a few minutes to write. >.> “If you’re suggesting I stayed up all night trying to [write a baby-pitch]…you’re right.” As always, The Simpsons always know just what to say.
(2) Avrilis knew saving a boy’s life meant they’d be hunted, but if change really can stop this life from replaying it just might be worth it.
(3) Preserving the time loop prohibits Avrilis from saving a boy’s life, but if making an illegal change can end the replay, it may be worth it.
(4) Maintaining the time loop bars Avrilis from saving a boy’s life but if an illegal change can end the replay and rebuild her life, she must.
Did I mention you guys are totally encouraging me to keep posting? (I amuse myself by thinking how I totally owe it to you to show you the process you’re stimulating!)
(5) Avrilis can save a young man’s life, but since changes threaten the sacred time-loop, she’ll be making them both fugitives on two planets.
I like that one. And I will. For the next seven seconds. Poll: Who feels like they’ve betrayed their novel? Anyone?